 Touch [P] [ READ THIS TITLE ] Genre(s): Free Form,
RomanceLanguage: English Author: scrapsoflife
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Mesquite :
I'm new and catching up on all the writers on Bards. I have read lots so far and am so impressed by all of your writing. Loved your story "Backseats" and this poem is fantastic- sure hope you will post more on the site for us to enjoy and ponder. Wonderful critique from Tara Nicholas.
(19-Jan-08)
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Tara Nicholas : This first passage is so smooth - like a good dance, I suppose.
"It begins with Touch
Dancing strangers
hip to hip
cloth between
then
later
nothing"
I think the last stanza is most poignant.
"Memories cannot sustain
the result
of choices"
How many times have we made a choice that costs us more than expected at the time? How many choices bring unexpected, unforeseen consequences? And even if you look back on those times, feelings, events can you really grasp the truth of the moment, of the events that seemed so clear in the moment? Do you often wonder, "How did this happen?"
There's a lot in this poem. It has a melancholy about it I like. Perhaps I'm a masochist in some regards? Thanks for sharing. (15-Nov-07) Author Reply: "Thanks for the feedback, Tara, I'm glad you liked it." (20-Nov-07)
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