 Loneliness [P] [ READ THIS TITLE ] Genre(s): Short ShortLanguage: English Author: Scenery
Brief Synopsis
Ramblings of a sleepness night.
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Reviews
Mesquite : Hey- Scenery,
I',m glad you titled the "Ramblings---" cause you caught me thinking this was non-fiction as I was readinf and then I checked anf found it was not- so you really did get me! A bit choppy but very real. Yes, the shower scene was good (brought back memories of my youth). Keep writing! (16-Jan-08)
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Tara Nicholas : I'm not sure this is a short short but I got into it after a while.
The rambling was a bit much but the consistent flow from thought to thought (about your men and loves) kept it interesting. I like how your actions in real life brought up memories of the past. It's like that sometimes.
The shower scene description was very tastefully done and felt real. Like you'd have in a real relationship, which I'm thinking it was. If someone didn't know what it was like showering with another person well now they do. And your memories of that time made it very personal. I liked that part the best.
The use of smells and touch was good. It also served to progress the story. The end wrapped it up nicely (and gave a glimmer of hope) and brought it back to the beginning.
Thanks for sharing. (05-Sep-07)
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