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Sghoul Image Victoria City Heroes - Chapter 3^[P] [• READ THIS TITLE •]
Genre(s): Science Fiction•Language: English
Author: Sghoul

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Part of this Series: Victoria City Heroes Synopsis: Super Hero story taking place in the fictional city of Victoria City

Reviews

Tara Nicholas : Thank you for sharing this story. I hope there is more, eventually. This chapter seemed a little too forced. It felt like you were rushing ahead to get to the "good" stuff and simply info dumped the back story for the reader. Take some time and consider other ways to present this history. Perhaps Pyramid and Jester are having a conversation and little bits come out in the telling. Perhaps as Jester is walking through the room (which also felt like an info dump) it brings up memories of his time in Aztec. You don't have to say everything about the character's backstory all at once. Only say a little bit and present more details, or even a completely new memory/history, later. I'm enjoying this world and your characters but they seem to lack subtly and flavor in their telling. It's like Friday says, "Just the facts, please." Your imagination is very vivid and I love the switch to go to different dimensions - Nowhere! That's great. Please continue and I look forward to the next chapter but don't be afraid to take time with the story, paragraphs, and characters. It's not a race. :) (23-Aug-07)

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